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IELTS General Training Task 1 Writing model answer 010

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IELTS General Training Task 1 Writing model answer 10

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement for a part time job welcoming visitors to your town. Write to the recruiters. In your letter

  • Explain why you want the job
  • Describe why you would be a good person for the role
  • Describe any relevant experience you may have

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear…

Write at least 150 words.

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IELTS General Training Task 1 Writing model answer 10Dear Sir / Madam,

I noted with interest that you are currently looking for someone to act as a guide to new arrivals to our local area, and I would like to put myself forward for the position.

As a local resident of some 25 years, I am very familiar with the location, and have actually spent some time in researching the history of the town. As you may know, the house I live in is one of the oldest buildings in the area and dates back over 100 years, so I feel I am perhaps in a unique position to give visitors an interesting and informative perspective of where we live.

I have a background in lecturing, so I feel that I would be able to address groups of people clearly and confidently, and my experience with students from overseas would certainly help, given the multinational nature of visitors that we have here.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Peter Carlisle

(163 words)

IELTS Task 2 writing sample answer Band 5 Essay 3

IELTS Task 2 writing sample answer Band 7 Essay 1

IELTS writing sample answer

Band score: approximately 7.0

Task: Task 2

The answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the report.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


IELTS Task 2 writing sample answer Band 7 Essay 1Many people argue that success in life is related to being rich and having a successful career [this is taken directly from the title – it is important to paraphrase]. However, in my opinion [this would be better phrased as ‘it could be argued that’], there are several other factors that have to be considered, as as I will now explain [‘as will now be explained’ is more academic].

Primarily, the definition of success can be extremely controversial. There can be as many types of success in life [this is a repeat of the opening phrase used in the introduction] as there are people. For example, the meaning of success for some people living in the countryside might be vastly different from these [‘those’] living in the big [‘major’ would be more academic] cities. In general, people in the countryside thrive for [‘thrive on’ or ‘strive for’] social respect, [no need for a comma here] and family values rather than monetary accounts [this isn’t clear – it could be ‘monetary gain’]. They seem to be happier when they feel respected by their relatives, or their ideas [‘opinions’ suits better] are considered highly among their community.

Moreover, a considerable portion [‘proportion’] of people find their satisfaction in good education. They have eagerness [‘an eagerness’] to learn and gain more knowledge. They believe [these setences could be combined – ‘…knowledge, believing’] that knowledge [use a reference word to avoid repetition – ‘this’] is power and a way to lighten their minds and lives. To illustrate, many scientists have devoted their lives in [‘to’] research to make a discovery or an invention, and even thought [‘though’] these people did [‘may’] not have luxurious lives, not many can argue that they were not successful.

Furthermore, in many cases, we judge others [‘people are judged’ – avoid using we] by their outside appearance; that they are successful because they own, for example, a big [‘large’ is a little more academic] house, an expensive car, or a good business. But [‘However,’] owning these items would not always make them feel successful unless for instant [‘instance’], their family life is stable, their health is in good shape, or they really feel satisfied with what they have.

To conclude, I believe that there are many factors that should be taken into account besides wealth and successful career [this is directly from the title] before judging that [‘whether’] a person is really successful in his life.

(291 words)


Comments:

Although certain phrases could have been more academically expressed, this is a well presented response to the task and is laid out in logical paragraphs.

Avoiding the use of the personal pronoun ‘I’ would make the essay more academic, as well as upgrading some of the vocabulary (e.g. ‘big cities’ could be expressed as ‘larger urban areas’).

Linking words could also be improved, especially avoiding beginning a sentence with ‘But’.


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IELTS Task 2 Writing model answer 012

IELTS Task 2 Writing model answer 12

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:

What are the advantages and disadvantages of having older people living in the family home?

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

IELTS Task 2 Writing model answer 12In many traditional cultures, members of the same family will live together from childhood to old age. In many cases, older family members living at home is a trend which has both positive and negative aspects.

A significant point in favour of this is that it provides a good support network for parents, both of whom may work outside of the home. Having grandparents on hand to look after the children can potentially provide a more stable environment as the child will have a familiar face at home until the parents have finished working.

Influence of the grandparents extends beyond simple babysitting, however. They are able to provide a source of advice and knowledge that can greatly benefit all members of the family on a range of subjects, especially for when there are new born babies in the home as this can be a stressful time for new parents.

There are, of course, also disadvantages in having older people at home. There is the issue of space, as the family home may not be big enough to accommodate everyone comfortably. There is also the issue of deciding which members of the family should live together, as both the husband and wife may both have surviving parents.

To conclude, there are clear positives and negatives to having older members of the family living in the same house. Although at times there may be frictions typical when people live together, this is arguably outweighed by the advantages of the support and knowledge older people are able to offer.

(256 words)

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 8 Report 2

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 8 Report 2

Band score: approximately 8.0

Format: Academic

Task: Task 1

The answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the report.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the number of children in two different age groups in an average class in different countries.

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 8 Report 2

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

The bar chart compares the average number of pupils per class in four different countries: Japan, Hong Kong, Russia and the United States. The vertical axis shows the students per class from 0 to 40 and the two coloured columns present the children’s ages, 9 and 13.

As can be seen in the graph, the significantly lowest number with just over 10 pupils regarding the age group 9, concerns Russia. [Although not grammatically wrong, we tend to put the subject first if the object phrase is long (i.e. ‘Russia had the significantly lowest number with just over 10 pupils regarding the age group 9’] It is followed by the United States (slightly more than 40 [’20’]) and by Japan with a number of around 30 pupils. In Hong Kong, there are about 35 students in a class. The number of students per class in all countries, except Russia, reaches or exceeds the global average (22).

The number of students in Japan and Hong Kong are inverse in comparing [‘when comparing’] the age [‘those students aged’] 9 with the age [‘those aged’] 13. In other words, Japanese classes are the biggest (35) and are succeeded by Hong Kong (marginally over 30 students).

The Russian (about 10) and American (17) figures are inferior to [this is a value judgement, meaning ‘not as good as’ – avoid making judgements in Task I by using something like ‘lower than’] the global average (18).

Overall, just Japan and Hong Kong are above, Russia is below and America correspond [‘corresponds’] with the global average.

(192 words)


Comments:

The introduction is excellent, but the presentation of data in parenthesis (brackets) is not ideal.

There are one or two areas where the vocabulary could be improved, but in general this is very well written with only minor points to change to achieve a top score.


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IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 8 Report 1

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 8 Report 1

Band score: approximately 8.0

Format: Academic

Task: Task 1

The answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the report.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the amount of coal used by different sectors in the UK.

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 8 Report 1

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

The table provides information about coal consumed for different purposes in Britain from 1975 to 2000.

The total consumption declined steadily in [‘over’] these 25 years, from 156.9 [include the unit of measurement – ‘156.9 million tonnes’] in 1975 to 63.1 [try to use a range of expressions, such as ‘just above 60 million tonnes’] in 2000, which was less than one third of the former figure. Power stations was [even though ‘sector’ is singular, power stations are plural so commonly this would be ‘were’] the leading sector in all 5 categories, which drecreased [the ‘which’ clause refers back to the previous noun, so the sentence means that the number of categories was decreasing, which is not the case – it was the amount used that was decreasing] in general though there was a rise in 1980, when it [‘they’ – power stations are plural] used about 3 quarters of the total amount of coal.

The other 3 sectors, comprising the domestic, industry, and services industries, dropped in this period except a leveling off was found in 1990-1995 for domestic, in [‘and in’] 1995-2000 for services and other energy industries. The most dramatic decreases were in 1980; the consumptions [‘when consumption’] declined to less than 50% the [‘of the’] previous timeframe in all 4 sectors. Services [‘The services sector’] used the least coal in all these years, which was less than 2% of consumption of leading [‘the leading’] sector, power stations, in 2000.

To sum up, less coal was used in general in Britain in [‘over’] these 25 years, either [‘both’] in particular [‘the individual’] sector [‘sectors’] or [‘and’] in total consumption.

(177 words)


Comments:

There is a clear overview of the whole table, and the writer has referred to each of the sectors and has used an appropriate academic format throughout.

There are minor issues relating to vocabulary and grammar, but the structure is clear, sentences are extended and paragraphs are clearly divided.


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IELTS General Training model answer

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 7 Letter 1

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 7 Letter 1

Band score: approximately 7.0

Format: General Training

Task: Task 1

The ielts writing sample answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the letter.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear………………………

New neighbours have recently moved in, but they are making a lot of noise at night while you are preparing for your exams. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter:

  • explain that they are preventing you from studying well
  • suggest what they can do to improve the situation
  • tell them when you will have completed your studies

 


IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 7 Letter 1

Dear Mr Charlie [‘Charlie’ is commonly a nickname used for Charles, a first name. It would be safer to use a name that is clearly a surname – Smith, for example.],

I am writing this letter to you to inform you of the disturbance which is caused by you [‘you are causing’ (it is not common to use a passive construction for this sentence)] during the night time [delete this word].

It is over a month now and you have been playing your grand piano for many consecutive nights. I have my exams coming next week, due [‘but due’ (you need a linking word)] to the disturbance, I have not been able to concentrate on my calculus which is on Monday.

It is not only me who is disturbed by your music, but all of us in the nearby area who are disturbed [try to avoid repetition of the same vocabulary] and so I am writing to you on their behalf too.

I am not telling you to stop playing your piano, I am just requesting you to change your schedule. Switch the timings of your piano [again, avoid repetition – this word can simply by deleted] playing, preferably with some other activity in the day [this isn’t clear – the writer has previously stated that the problem is at night, so why change to another activity during the day?]. I hope you can understand and follow what I have said. Thank You [punctuation – a full stop is needed here]

Yours faithfully,

Graeme Treherne

(151 words)


Comments:

There are a few issues with punctuation that make some of the sentences unclear. There are also minor errors in vocabulary and sentence structure.

Although the register (tone) of the letter is generally accurate, it is common to be polite in letters that are complaining but also requesting, yet this letter is quite confrontational, and would be more appropriate if it was written in a slightly more friendly tone.

The paragraphing of the letter is suitable, and all the key points have been covered.

 

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 5 Essay 3

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 8 Letter 1

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 8 Letter 1

Band score: approximately 8.0

Format: General Training

Task: Task 1

The ielts writing sample answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the letter.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear………………………

A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter:

  • explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and get into the house
  • tell your relative how to get from the train station to your house
  • say when you will be home and suggest what you could do together that evening

 


IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 8 Letter 1Dear John,

I am very glad you are coming to visit me. Unfortunately, I will be busy until the evening on the day you arrive, but dont [‘don’t’] worry, I left [‘will leave’] the keys to my house under the door math [‘mat’] so you can get in and make yourself at home until I get there.

Now, once you get out of [‘off’] the train go directly to the bus station and wait for the number 45 route bus that will take you to my house. It is a twenty minute bus trip that makes a nice tour through town. When the bus reaches the old church at Winchester Avenue get off the bus [delete this (repetition)] and walk one block down to get to my house. The full adress is 357 Winchester Avenue.

I will be arriving [this is slightly too formal for a letter to a friend – ‘get back’ suits better] around 7:00 p.m. which is a perfect time for us to have some italian dinner on a nice restaurant downtown. [‘dinner at a great Italian restaurant downtown’]

Yours sincerely, [again, this is a little too formal – could say ‘all the best’ or ‘looking forward to seeing you’]

David

(158 words)


Comments:

This is a well written letter that covers all sections of the question. There are a few issues with punctuation (‘italian’), but overall the vocabulary and grammar are well controlled.

The ending of the letter (‘yours sincerely’) doesn’t suit a letter to a family member, but apart from that the register is appropriate.

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 6 Letter 1

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 6 Letter 1

Band score: approximately 6.0

Format: General Training

Task: Task 1

The answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the letter.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear………………………

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

Write a letter to your teacher. In your letter:

  • explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
  • say what you would like to do about your studies
  • ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

IELTS General Task 1 writing sample answer Band 6 Letter 1

Dear Mr. Smith

I am writing regarding the management course that I have been attending at your management [delete this – this word has been used at the beginning of the sentence] institute at the evening hours [‘during the evenings’]. I need to say that, unfortunately, due to my involvement in an urgent task at my work, I will not be able to continue my management [also delete this to avoid repetition] classes during the coming period.

As you are aware, I am working as a project manager in a construction compay. A new contract has been awarded to our company, and I have been given the mission to complete [‘the task of completing’ would be more common] this project in [‘within’] a tight time frame. In [‘Given’] this situation, I will have to stay extra [‘work additional’ would be better)] hours at my office to ensure that the work progresses satisfactorily.

However, I am still interested in completing the management couse, but [the sentence would be better constructed as ‘I am still interested in completing the management course; however, …] I would prefer to reschedule it to the next term when I will have completed my new project and can spare enough time for studying. I will [‘would’] appreciate it if you could direct me to the appropriate action that I have to take in order to arrange for postponing my course.

I thank you in advance for your assistance.

Kindest regards [this needs to be followed by a comma]

Matt Davison

(188 words)


Comments:

Despite some good language, the writer has overused certain vocabulary (‘management’ 3 times in the introduction alone) and this has reduced the result.

Some sentences are overly complicated and the meaning is a little unclear at times (‘I would appreciate it if you could direct me to the appropriate action that I have to take in order to arrange for postponing my course’).

There are grammar errors in some of the more advanced sentences (‘I will appreciate it if you would’).

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 6 Report 3

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 6 Report 3

Band score: approximately 6.0

Format: Academic

Task: Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows how people travelled to work in 1996 and 2001.

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 6 Report 3

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


This chart compares how people travelled to work in year [you don’t need this – it is clear from the context – but if you do have it, then you need ‘the years…’] 1996 and 2001. Approximately 68%  of people travelled by car or truck in year [you don’t need this – it is clear from the context or would need ‘the year’] 2001 as compare [‘compared’] to 1996. The least number of people travelled by walking [change this to ‘on foot’ so it fits the sentence better]  in 2001 and very few travelled by bicycle in 1996.

Most people preferred [we don’t know that they preferred it, and it wasn’t most people, it was very few] working from home in year 2001 because of advanced technology in computers [this is not given in the graph so should not be included in the report] in comparison to the use of private vehicles in year 1996.

The other ways of travel was [‘were’] taxi, ferry etc. [avoid using this in your IELTS writing] in 1996 and 2001. In 2001, the order was passengers in private vehicles, public transport, bicycle and walking, while in 1996 the preferred way was public transport, others, walking, and bicycle. Although the order changed, there was not a significant difference between them over the period when compared to driving own their own vehicle.

To summarise there has been not much [‘were relatively minor’] changes in route to [‘mode of’] travel that is either by driving a car or truck in year 1996 and  in 2001.

(162 words)


Comments:

Although the writer has covered the main points shown in the graph, this is only supported by one piece of data (68%). It is important to support your sentences with relevant statistics from the graph or chart.

There are also some irrelevant sections (such as using computers in the first body paragraph). Some sentences show a good use of grammar, while other sentences are less accurate.

The description of the ‘other’ category is quite repetitive, but the main points are covered in a suitable number of words, and ideas are logically arranged in paragraphs.


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IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 6 Report 2

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 6 Report 2

Band score: approximately 6.0

Format: Academic

Task: Task 1

The answer below has been rated purely based on the public IELTS descriptors. Click the word or words in red to see the correction, and scroll to the bottom of the page to read our comments on the report.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the number of children in two different age groups in an average class in different countries.

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 6 Report 2

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates the number of students on [‘in’] an average class at different ages (9 and 13) in different countries [be more specific – ‘in 4 different countries as well as the global average’].

It is clearly shown in the graph that Hong Kong and Japan had the most [‘highest’] number of students at the age of 9; Hong Kong had 35 number of [delete this] students per class at age 9 [This could have been more succinctly put – ‘Hong Kong had 35 students per class, while Japan had 31.’] while Japan had moreover [this linking word is not appropriate here] 31 number of [delete this] students per class. However, Japan had an increase number of students [delete this – it is repetition] to about 24 but the students in Hong Kong dropped at [‘to’] 31 students per class at the age 13.

The United States and the Global Average [no need for capital letters here – ‘global average’] had an equal number of 23 students per class at the age of 9 but fell by age 13.

Russia, on the other hand [this phrase needs to be surrounded by commas – ‘Russia, on the other hand, had…’] got [this is too informal – ‘had’] the lowest number of students both at age 9 and 13, having only 10 and 9 students per class accordingly.

To summarise, at the age of 9 [comma needed here too] there were more students in Hong Kong [we don’t know that there were more students in the country – only that they had more per class] but as the students reached the age of 13, most of the students [Again, we don’t know that ‘most’ students studied in Japan, only that they had most per class] were [delete this] studied in Japan.

(176 words)


Comments:

The main information is given, but there are very few sentences that do not contain errors. There are some inappropriate words as well as some incorrect grammar, and this is reducing the overall score. Some of the data is also incorrect – the number of Japanese students aged 13 did not rise to 24, it rose to 34.

However, the paragraphing is clear and logical.


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