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IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 7 Report 2

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IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 7 Report 2

Band score: approximately 7.0

Format: Academic

Task: Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the amount of coal used by different sectors in the UK.

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 7 Report 2

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The table gives data about the quantity of coal used by 5 sectors in the UK within a period of 25 years; in addition, the level of consumption at each year the table shows the years in 5 yearly increments, not ‘each year’ is illustrated.

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From 1975 to 1985, the largest amount consumed was by Power no need for a capital letter stations and Other again, no need for a capital unless it is written as the category name as ‘Other’ energy industries, whereas three the three other sectors used considerably less. To illustrate, Services either ‘the sector entitled ‘Services’ or ‘the services sector’ used 7.2 million of tonnes from 1975 to 1985, but power stations figures the figures for power stations for the same period of time were 250.8 million use a range of ways of presenting data – ‘just over 250 million’ tonnes. It was striking the fact that in 1985 Power stations used more than three quarters of the total quantity.

In the following decade from 1990 to 2000, consuming ‘consumption’ of coal decreased in all sectors. However, power stations remained still delete this word – it is redundant the highest user of coal, followed by other energy industries which utilized significantly less compared to power stations and over three times more ‘less’ than they did in 1975.

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Overall, the trend of coal consumption experienced decline ‘a decline’ for all sectors with one exception in 1980 when power stations increased just under 10%. Domestic consumption levelled off in 1990 and 1995 whereas this needs to be followed by a comma other energy industries reached a plateau in 1995 and 2000.

(182 words)

 

 


Comments:

The structure of the report is logical and clear, and a description of all the main trends is included.

However, there are some errors in the data (and over three times more than they did in 1975), and some of the language used is a little informal (‘than they did’).

There are also slight errors in the use of linking words (in addition / meanwhile). In addition, the data is presented in a very specific manner – it would be better to use a range of expressions rather than simply the numbers.

 


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IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 7 Report 1

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 7 Report 1

Band score: approximately 7.0

Format: Academic

Task: Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the sources of carbon dioxide emissions between 1970 and 2000.

IELTS Academic Task 1 writing sample Band 7 Report 1

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The line graph illustrates the quantity of carbon dioxide released from different sources in UK, ‘the UK’] during ‘from’ – during is used for a single period of time, not as a starting point (e.g. during 1990) 1970 to 2000.

As can be seen from the graph this needs to be followed by a comma the tonnes released ranked from just over 10 million up to 65 million. From the 5 sources used this needs to be followed by a comma 4 of them had fairly stable carbon dioxide emission till 1980 with an exception from ‘the exception of’ industrial combustion which had the ‘a’ steady decline over these years.

From 1980 to 1990 this needs to be followed by a comma there were changes in all presented sources. Transport and industrial combustion had ’emitted’ or ‘were responsible for’ almost the same quantity at the end of 1990. Power stations account ‘accounted’ for the biggest ‘largest’ would be more academic quantity, releasing almost five times more than other sectors which again over this period of time remained the best releasers a good attempt at rephrasing, but not a common construction – better would be ‘released the least’.

In the meantime this is used for two actions happening at the same time, but this sentence refers to the following decade (1990-2000) so is inappropriate in 1990 to 2000 the trend was the same with the starting year with the only exception that transport took over ‘overtook’ (although ‘exceeded’ would be better) the domestic. While industrial combustion, domestic, transport and other sectors’ carbon dioxide emissions almost levelled off, the power stations figure moderately fell.

To conclude To conclude is not the best way to end Task I – it suggests a balance of opinion, but Task I has no opinions – it is fact. Better would be ‘To sum up’, the quantity of carbon dioxide emissions reduced in 2000.

(176 words)


Comments:

This is a clear and concise description of the graph. There is a good range of grammar and some appropriate vocabulary, although some language is a little too informal (e.g. ‘biggest’).

There are some issues with punctuation (‘In the meantime in 1990 to 2000 the trend was…’) as well as some repeated errors with articles (had the steady decline)

The closing sentence highlights the main trend well, and the introduction is clear. Most of the important sections of the graph have been highlighted, although the writer could have added that industrial combustion fell the most over the given period.

 


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